Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the de-globalisation progressing, regional
protectionism
is spreading in many sections, one of which is food
supply. Some people have even argued that we should boycott importing food
and completely depend on domestic agricultural products. This
opinion is understandable when given the competition domestic farmers are under, but it is not reasonable and practicable as we are living in a society which has never been so interdependent on each other.
The basic and essential fact that we humans are radically reliant on each other in the issue of the food
supply is often covered by the so mature collaborative mechanisms that we wrongly preassume that we can be independent of other countries. For example
, many people assume that China is self-subsistent in soybeans as there are few importing data in records published by Customs. However
, in reality, soybeans are imported in the form of oil calculated by millions of tons. This
edible oil is a definite indication of food
-related dependence, but it is so often ignored that provokes people to assert that importing food
is merely superabundance.
But note that when analysing this
issue, I am not intent on farmers' "ignorance". Instead
, I can totally understand their wish to replace all imported food
with domestic products. This
is happening in Poland where farmers are suffering from the influx of Ukraine's wheat, which is a part of the aid pacts for Ukraine. Poland's wheat price has been decreasing for over fourteen months, on which many rural families' lives depend, how could we blame them for appealing for protectionism
? Nevertheless
, I still insist that conflicts and corresponding protectionism
are temporary, but cooperation and collaboration between different countries are permanent and essential. We should concentrate on how to get through it instead
of reinforcing it.
To summarise, conflicts and tensions across the world are stimulating all forms of protectionism
, surely including the boycott of foreign food
. But we should not justify or even strengthen this
trend since we have been so closely connected with the members of the global community that any break will pose serious issues.Submitted by hx88375757 on
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task achievement
Provide clear examples or statistics to strengthen the argument, especially when mentioning countries like Poland or concepts like import dependency.
task achievement
Make sure to develop the points further to cover different perspectives on food import regulations, such as economic impacts, cultural effects, or environmental concerns.
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coherence cohesion
The essay begins with a clear introduction, setting the stage for the discussion about food importation and regional protectionism.
coherence cohesion
The arguments are logically structured, with the introduction and conclusion effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
Demonstrates an understanding of global interdependence and effectively argues against overly protectionist policies.
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