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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart provides information about the percentage of
Americans
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 who ate at fast
food
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 restaurants frequently from 2003 to 2013.
It is clear that
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 the largest proportion of
Americans
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 ate fast
food
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 every
week
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 in 2003 and 2006.
However
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, by 2013,
Americans
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 tended to decrease the frequency of eating fast
food
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 to once or twice a month. Looking at the information in more detail, in 2003 and 2006, the majority opted for eating fast
food
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 every
week
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. In the former year,
this
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 constituted around 31%,
while
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 in the latter year, it increased to approximately 33%.
On the other hand
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, nearly 33% of
Americans
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 chose to eat fast
food
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 once or twice a month, which was the highest percentage in 2013. In terms of other frequencies of eating at fast
food
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 restaurants, the percentages of several times a
week
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 and a few times a
week
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 ranged between nearly 12% and 20%.
Additionally
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,
Americans
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day,
as well as
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 those who never ate it, comprised the lowest proportion, each less than 5%, during the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words americans, food, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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