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write a referral letter to a gastroenterologist

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I am writing to refer Ms Hall, a 48 -48-year-old teacher with
acute
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coarse
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course
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 of dysphagia to Solid
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who
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 is highly suspicious of esophageal stenosis for your assessment and final diagnosis. Ms Hall came today with
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weeks
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 history of dysphagia to solids with no improvement. She had a viral upper respiratory tract infection and self-managed with herbal Chinese products with unknown content. Dysphagia associated with epigastric pain radiating to
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 on T12 vertebrae. No lamp sensation was reported;
however
, she has had
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 loss
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-2 kg. It should be mentioned that she is taking aspirin 2-3 times per month and has increased coffee consumption recently. She is a social alcohol drinker. She reported a previous history of dyspepsia in 2012 and asthma and peptic ulcer disease in her first degree. She mentioned that she has an allergy to codeine and sulpha dioxide. I recommended
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to
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stop all herbal and OTC medicine,
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and reducing
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reducing
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 coffee consumption and alcohol drinking and I started pantoprazole 40 mg daily. I appreciate it if you could evaluate her for requiring any upper GI endoscopy and update us with your valuable information.
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greeting and closing
Remember to include a formal greeting and closing in your letters to maintain a professional tone.
logical structure
Organising your letter into clear paragraphs for each main point can enhance readability and structure.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or piece of information for clarity and coherence.
complete response
Your detailed description of Ms. Hall's symptoms and medical history contributes significantly to the completeness of the task.
suitable writing tone
The professional tone of your letter is suitable for communication between medical professionals.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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