The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table of statistics illustrates the ratio of humans
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different range of
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had the tendency to lay
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the four
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of job in the years 1998 and 2006,
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hotel and catering, building,
technology
, and education are the points in case.
Overall
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fluctuations
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growing popularity among
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youngsters
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technology
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decrease in the number of workers
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all ages in
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industry. On the one hand, in the hotel and catering and education the portion of people invested gradually changed over
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time. The
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hotel and catering subject demand was for the group of people
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the
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36-45 years old in the years 1998 and 2006. By
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way of comparison, not only did
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number not
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raise
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, but
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their population declined or at least remained
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constant
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,
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founders
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technology
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significant
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the area of
technology
evolution.
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technology
was the one and only sector which faced growth in all the ages.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words technology with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce distribution
  • significant
  • sector
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • composition
  • employment patterns
  • shift
  • notable
  • preference
  • age group
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • composition
  • reaffirm
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