The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following two pie graphs illustrate the revenue and expenditure sources of Youngster’s

Charity

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located in the United States in 2016. There are six revenue streams and three expenditure flows. On one hand, one of the major contributors to the

charity

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is donated food at 86.6%.

Furthermore

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, community sponsors are almost 10.4% compared to

money

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received from the program is 2.2%.

Consequently

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, the other three categories

such

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as government grants, investment income and other income contributed less than 1% of the total

money

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received from the

charity

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On the other hand

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, almost $ 51 million i.e. 95.8 % of the

money

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was spent on the program services.

However

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, the funds spent on fundraising was close to $1.5 million and management and general contributed almost $ 600 thousand, in total that accounted for an insignificant percentage of 4.2. In conclusion, the total

money

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received by the

charity

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was $53. 6 million, which was only .6% more than the

money

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spent in 2016.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, money with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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