The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following two pie graphs illustrate the revenue and expenditure sources of Youngster’s
Charity
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located in the United States in 2016. There are six revenue streams and three expenditure flows. On one hand, one of the major contributors to the
charity
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is donated food at 86.6%.
Furthermore
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, community sponsors are almost 10.4% compared to
money
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received from the program is 2.2%.
Consequently
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, the other three categories
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as government grants, investment income and other income contributed less than 1% of the total
money
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received from the
charity
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.
On the other hand
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, almost $ 51 million i.e. 95.8 % of the
money
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was spent on the program services.
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, the funds spent on fundraising was close to $1.5 million and management and general contributed almost $ 600 thousand, in total that accounted for an insignificant percentage of 4.2. In conclusion, the total
money
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received by the
charity
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was $53. 6 million, which was only .6% more than the
money
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spent in 2016.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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