The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following two pie graphs illustrate the revenue and expenditure sources of Youngster’s
Charity
located in the United States in 2016. There are six revenue streams and three expenditure flows.
On one hand, one of the major contributors to the charity
is donated food at 86.6%. Furthermore
, community sponsors are almost 10.4% compared to money
received from the program is 2.2%. Consequently
, the other three categories such
as government grants, investment income and other income contributed less than 1% of the total money
received from the charity
.
On the other hand
, almost $ 51 million i.e. 95.8 % of the money
was spent on the program services. However
, the funds spent on fundraising was close to $1.5 million and management and general contributed almost $ 600 thousand, in total that accounted for an insignificant percentage of 4.2.
In conclusion, the total money
received by the charity
was $53. 6 million, which was only .6% more than the money
spent in 2016.Submitted by sakshi.s16 on
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