Some people like to try new things.for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with Discuss both these attitudes and your own opinion.

The majority of
people
like to try new
things
like visiting new places and trying to eat a variety of
foods
.
On the other hand
, they love to
visit
and usually
visit
the place and try day-to-day eating
foods
only. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and I give you my opinion. On the one hand, nowadays many young
people
love to travel to new places
such
as overseas, museums, and mountains.
Firstly
, most
people
try to travel to other countries and they explore the countries and where they live, what they eat, and which language they speak.
For example
, my elderly brother visited overseas her explored her
life
.
secondly
, if someone visits
to
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mountains they can explore
for
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animals,
waterfalls
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love to try
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variety
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things
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change.
On the other hand
, the majority of other
people
their everyday lifestyles same because they have financial problems. If they the same new place or they
visit
overseas they have to spend a lot of money. If they try to eat new food it is very expensive.
For instance
, when someone goes to a pizza hut compared to other
foods
pizza is very expensive.
Therefore
, they can not try it. In conclusion, the majority of
people
try to
visit
a new place and they eat new
foods
they can explore the country and their
life
. Other
people
who have some financial problems and they can not try
to
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new
things
.in my opinion, is visiting new places and trying new
things
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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