Some people like to try new things.for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with Discuss both these attitudes and your own opinion.
The majority of
people
like to try new Use synonyms
things
like visiting new places and trying to eat a variety of Use synonyms
foods
. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, they love to Linking Words
visit
and usually Use synonyms
visit
the place and try day-to-day eating Use synonyms
foods
only. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will discuss both views and I give you my opinion.
On the one hand, nowadays many young Linking Words
people
love to travel to new places Use synonyms
such
as overseas, museums, and mountains. Linking Words
Firstly
, most Linking Words
people
try to travel to other countries and they explore the countries and where they live, what they eat, and which language they speak. Use synonyms
For example
, my elderly brother visited overseas her explored her Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
secondly
, if someone visits Linking Words
to
mountains they can explore Remove the preposition
apply
for
animals, Change preposition
apply
waterfalls
, because, they Correct word choice
and waterfalls
are
love to try Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct article usage
a veriety
veriety
of Correct your spelling
variety
things
Use synonyms
exporing
and it can be Verb problem
apply
Use synonyms
life
change.
Add an article
a life
On the other hand
, the majority of other Linking Words
people
their everyday lifestyles same because they have financial problems. If they the same new place or they Use synonyms
visit
overseas they have to spend a lot of money. If they try to eat new food it is very expensive. Use synonyms
For instance
, when someone goes to a pizza hut compared to other Linking Words
foods
pizza is very expensive. Use synonyms
Therefore
, they can not try it.
In conclusion, the majority of Linking Words
people
try to Use synonyms
visit
a new place and they eat new Use synonyms
foods
they can explore the country and their Use synonyms
life
. Other Use synonyms
people
who have some financial problems and they can not try Use synonyms
to
new Change preposition
apply
things
.in my opinion, is visiting new places and trying new Use synonyms
things
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
people's
Correct pronoun usage
that people's
life
become a change.Use synonyms
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