Many agricultural lands are being converted into commercial centres. How does this affect the environment and people’s lifestyle? Discuss this situation and provide suggestions to address these issues. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.
In the contemporary era, commercial
land
is replacing the
agricultural Correct article usage
apply
land
which is causing exploitation
of natural resources and changing Correct article usage
the exploitation
lives
of the masses. Correct article usage
the lives
However
, this
development has to be well-planned to avoid the negative impact on the environment. There are a
myriad Correct article usage
apply
of
suggestions that can alleviate the problems and will be examined Change preposition
apply
further
in this
essay.
To begin
with, when some infrastructure projects are created then
farming land
is taken over by businesses or authorities for the expansion of the urban communities. Although
, many issues can cause disturbance in the surroundings. Correct word choice
However
For example
, different types of flora and fauna of that area are displaced from their natural habitat and this
further
reduce
their population Change the verb form
reduces
thus
lead
to Wrong verb form
leading
destruction
of Add an article
the destruction
a
food chain. Correct article usage
the
Similarly
, people move to city centres and this
cause
pressure on the urban ecosystem. The urban areas become highly polluted. To exemplify, waste management is so problematic in cities of developing nations because they have fewer landfill sites left to throw garbage.
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
In contrast
, there are a plethora of solutions for this
issue. First,
it is crucial to allocate farming land
to farmers to compensate for the loss of the
livelihood which they have to confront after their Change the word
their
land
is took
over by new projects. Change the verb form
is taken
For instance
, in many countries, to decrease the pressure of unemployment the governments of various nations promote
them to continue Verb problem
encourage
self employment
occupations Add a hyphen
self-employment
such
as farming so they provide agricultural land
at lease or low price. Furthermore
, villages should have more facilities which will reduce the migration from countryside
to metropolitan cities which is Add an article
the countryside
due to
the search of
better living conditions.
Change preposition
for
To conclude
, many problems are caused by ecosystem imbalance and polluted urban areas which arises
from commercialization. Change the verb form
arise
However
, this
situation can be ameliorated by compensating the farmers and also
through improving facilities in the villages which can decrease burden
on city areas.Add an article
the burden
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