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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004. Write at least 150 words.
#oil #production #countries
The table illustrates
that
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the
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oil
 manufacturing numbers of
batterls
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batteries
batters
 per
day
 in 4 different
counrtries
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countries
 during a period from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
, it shows a trend of growth in
production
 from all the countries, which includes, Nigeria, Cha, Congo and Somalia. It is
obviously
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obvious
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 that Chad did not start
oil
production
 until 2003 and started with 8000
barrels
 per
day
, within a year,
reach
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reaching
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 the peak of 50,000
barrels
 per
day
. Somalia shows a similar trend,in 2004, it produced 5000
barrels
 per
day
, four years later,
dragstically
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drastically
 jumped 10 times (50,000
barrels
 per
day
)
By
contrast
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contrast,
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 Congo has a
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tendency
tendecy
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tendency
 of decreasing in
oil
production
Also
 from the table, we can see that Congo stayed on top in
oil
production
 throughout the years
,
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apply
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but shows a tendency
of
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to
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 decrease in
oil
production
, which
lead
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led
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 to Nigeria
climbed
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climbing
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 to the top in 2004 with 213,000
barrels
 per
day
. In conclusion, the bar charts
shows
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show
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 4
countries
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countries'
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oil
production
berrels
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barrels
 numbers are growing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, day, production, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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