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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #character #culture #choice #clothes
Part of society believes that
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clothes
what
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that
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an
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individual wears express his personality and culture. In my conviction, people choose their
dersses
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dresses
according to
 the situation ,
additionaly
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additionally
additional
apperals
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apparels
appeals
 cannot
demarkated
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demarcated
according to
 their price or brand in
todays'
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today's
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 competitive market.
Therefore
, I wholeheartedly disagree with the captioned statement. First and foremost, individuals try to
taley
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tally
 with the occasion with their
clothes
 rather than to
showoff
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show off
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the
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their
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 character. Most people buy garments thinking
on
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about
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 the place where they have to wear
it
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them
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. If it is a party
then
 have to select
according to
 it and if it is a funeral
then
 have to choose a different
apperals
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apparels
appeals
 for it.
For instance
, the famous
multimillionier
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multimillionaire
 Elon Musk wears
full-suits fo
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full suits for
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the
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apply
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TV interviews and shorts for
the
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apply
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casual visits with his family.
Thus
 if somebody
try
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tries
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 to explain his
charactor
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character
while
 he is in
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a
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full suit what they would tell for the time he is wearing shorts, simply we cannot judge a person by their clothing.
Furthermore
, the higher competition in
garment
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the garment
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 industry creates
wide
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a wide
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varieties
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variety
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 of wearables
in
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with
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 a wide range of price differences.
Although
, the branded and
qality
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quality
 products are higher in price , exact looking cheap garments are readily available in the market.
For example
, the same
higher priced
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higher-priced
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 clothing that
Megana
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Megan
 Fox would wear can be seen wearing by the street girls in
Thaiwan
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Thailand
.
Hence
, again ,we can not match the
character
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characters
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 with their
apperals
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appearance
. In conclusion, People try to wear their
clothes
 in
related
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relation
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 to their
need
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needs
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 and occasion, admittedly making it wrong to judge their personality
according to
 it, and
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the
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avalability
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availability
 of exact replicas of branded clothing
make
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its
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it is
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further
 difficult to do the same. As
such
this
 writer has in strong notion that
clothes
 cannot judge
person's
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a person's
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 character or
the
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apply
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culture.
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