Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?
According to
some individuals' opinion
one thing that should habitually Add a comma
opinion,
provide
with money by Wrong verb form
provided
government
is Healthcare and it should always be gratis to everyone. I don't agree with Correct article usage
the government
this
notion due to
the fact that it has lots of impact to
the country's pocket so Change preposition
on
this
may be contrubute
to bad phenomenons.
From one perspective, some humans say Correct your spelling
contributed
contribute
about
health Change preposition
that
centers
must be funded by Change the spelling
centres
commonwealth
. Add an article
the commonwealth
However
, this
has repercussions. If it happens, many problems may be arise
and it impact to city's Change the verb form
arise
fund
. Fix the agreement mistake
funds
Furthermore
, doctors may be reduce
their attention and Change the verb form
reduce
then
patients' life
may be Fix the agreement mistake
lives
under
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in
the
danger. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, in accordance with statistics some private hospitals are more excellent than local one
because private health centers' directors always employ prominent people. But the local Correct pronoun usage
ones
centers
have some problems with employees namely they Change the spelling
centres
will
bad at treatment.
Verb problem
are
On the other hand
, this
opinion has some good aspects, too. If this
will happen
, Wrong verb form
happens
poor
population will be flattered Add an article
the poor
from
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by
government
now that if they Add an article
the government
will be
ill, they must borrow money. Wrong verb form
are
Moreover
, it deman
lots of money, and Correct your spelling
demands
then
they may not go doctor to check. Therefore
, many necessitous humans passes
away from various diseases. Change the verb form
pass
For instance
, in conformity with statistics Indian poor individuals are expiring because of different sicknesses.
In conclusion, if Medicare will
regularly Verb problem
is
be subsidize
by Wrong verb form
subsidised
city's
finances, and it Correct article usage
the city's
will be
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is
population
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the population
a population
pose
folks' happiness.Verb problem
save
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Structure
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Content
You provided a balanced view by discussing both positive and negative aspects of government-funded healthcare, which is good practice in addressing 'to what extent do you agree or disagree' questions.
Topic Engagement
Your willingness to engage with a complex topic like government-funded healthcare demonstrates an ability to tackle IELTS essay topics effectively.
Word Count
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