In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantage? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge for experience.
For me, I prefer to choose to study abroad.
While
there are good benefits in
studying in a foreign country.
On the one hand, there are many benefits of studying abroad. Change preposition
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Firstly
, overseas students
become more independent by living alone in foreign
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For instance
, they are responsible for cleaning, cooking, and paying bills. Secondly
, moving to other countries can broaden students
’ horizons. They get exposed to different cultures and customs and gain knowledge about them. Also
, overseas students
learn foreign languages to cope with the new culture
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Finally
, foreign institutions offer better courses for students
.The qualification gained open
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better job opportunities with high salaries.
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On the other hand
, I would argue that studying abroad has more negative impacts than the positive one
. One problem is that it can affect Correct pronoun usage
ones
students
psychologically. Studying alone in an unfamiliar culture
can lead to homesickness or even depression. Also
, this
different culture
may lead to culture
shock which may affect the student’s performance. Another drawback of studying overseas is that students
can experience some problems with paperwork like visa permit
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may add more pressure on the students
and interrupt their studying. Furthermore
, the language barrier may exacerbate the situation. Studying in a foreign language is a difficult task to
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may lead to the
isolation from the community and might cause a failure in studying.
In conclusion, the drawback of studying abroad outweighs the benefit and Correct article usage
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decision needs more assessment from the students
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Task Achievements
Keep a balanced view throughout the essay to provide a more nuanced argument. You initially argued for studying abroad but concluded against it. Ensure your position is clear and consistent.
Task Achievements
In your introduction and conclusion, clearly state your viewpoint to ensure the reader understands your position from the beginning.
Coherence Cohesion
Develop your paragraphs with a clearer structure by introducing one main point per paragraph and supporting it with detailed examples.
Coherence Cohesion
For a higher score, make links between your paragraphs clearer through the use of cohesive devices and transitional phrases.
Coherence Cohesion
Incorporate more complex sentence structures and vary your vocabulary to enhance your linguistic range and accuracy.
Task Achievements
Detailed examination of both sides of the argument, demonstrating good analytical skills.
Coherence Cohesion
Use of examples and scenarios to support arguments, demonstrating an understanding of the essay topic.