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Topic: The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present.

Topic: The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present.
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The graph illustrates the modifications of a community centre between 10 years ago and currently.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 most areas still remain the same size compared to the past.
However
, the purpose of the rooms has changed and some of them have been redesigned.
To begin
 with, the main hall with 100 seats, reception and entrance door were unchanged. The office which was located to the left of the reception was separated into two parts, the cafe at
top
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 and the toilet at
bottom
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.
Moreover
, The top large storage was shrunk and moved to the left whilst the new toilet was built on the right-hand side.
Additionally
, In both wings of the community centre, parking and kitchen were untouched;
besides
, the garden which was located at the top of the parking lots was replaced by an indoor sports area. Four office blocks and a wide storage room ,which were located in the right wing, were merged together and became a big cafe zone.
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