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Your friend invited you to his/her birthday party, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter apologizing for your absence. In your letter: State why you cannot go Explain your reason for not contacting your friend sooner Suggest another time to meet Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Smith, First of all, I 'm really sorry for
belated
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birthday
 wishes, I was not able to attend your
birthday
 party
due to
 an emergency
of
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with
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wife
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my wife
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. On that day, I reached
office
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the office
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 at 9.15 am, suddenly
neighbour
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a neighbour
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call came
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called
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 she said that
,
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apply
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your
wife
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wife's
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 health
conditions
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condition
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 was not good so you
could
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couldn't
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 come to the house, I '
immidiately
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immediately
 went to my house and
also
 went to
near
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the near
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hospital
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the hospital
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 so
that is
main
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the main
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 reason not attended to your party. Actually, I was in
hurry
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a hurry
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 at that time so I
need
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needed
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 to reach my home and
forgetton
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forgotten
forget
forgetting
about your
birthday
. my
wife
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wife's
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 health
conditons
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conditions
condition
 was not good at that time so I was not able to attend the
birthday
 party.
Moreover
, at the same
time
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time,
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 I called my father for
an
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apply
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urgent money required to deposit in
hospital
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the hospital
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. After that, my
wife
leave
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left
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 from hospital she was recovering day by day. I would like to meet you on
sunday
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Sunday
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 at 9.00 pm at your house. Dear Ramesh Yours Sincerely,
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structure
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Use separate paragraphs for different parts of the letter.
grammar/spelling
Check your spelling and grammar to make your letter easier to understand.
tone
Use a friendly and apologetic tone throughout the letter to express your regret for missing the birthday party more effectively.
content
You clearly stated the reason for your absence.
content
You suggested another time to meet, which is good for task completion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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