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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart delineates the average amount of contamination released into the
air
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 in four countries namely China, America, Japan and Australia in 2012
Overall
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, it was witnessed that industry was the main cause of
air
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 pollution in four surveyed countries.
Moreover
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, China was the most polluted nation throughout the period. More specifically, it was clear to see that industrial development was the key source that led to
air
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 contamination in China in 2012 with 90
PPM
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, followed by transportation and electricity generation with 70
PPM
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 and 60
PPM
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, respectively.
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, in America, the emissions from means of transport seemed like the main cause of
air
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 pollution with 60
PPM
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, lower than that were the electricity generation and industry with only half than that. Relating to the remaining features, industrial zones were the crucial factor that polluted the
air
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 in Japan, with more than 40
PPM
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,
besides
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 that, transportation held second with lower than 10
PPM
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 and the
last
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 was electricity generation. In Australia, it was likely that the levels of
air
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 pollution were gradually caused by all these three factors with nearly 20
PPM
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 in 2012

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollutants
  • Industrialization
  • Regulations
  • Geographical factors
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Carbon dioxide (CO2)
  • Particulate matter (PM)
  • Nitrogen oxides (NOx)
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Comparative analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
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