The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime
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The line graph compares the changes that took place in New Port city
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between 2003 and 2012.
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, between 2003 and 2012
car
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theft
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and robbery
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no change
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chart. But burglary decreased
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. In 2003 cases of
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burglary occurred about 3.500
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. The highest
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was in 2004
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4000
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.
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in
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2008,
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it decreased significantly to around 1.300 instances. In 2012 it was nearly 2.000 events.
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theft
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crime was near to 3000 in 2003. In 2006
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point
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2.000 and it was the lowest
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in
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theft
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crime. But till 2012 it increased
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by
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to about 2.700
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. So, in the case of
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theft
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there is almost no result. The third case is robbery. The starting
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crime was in 2003
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about 600
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. Until 2005 it increased moderately to near to 1000
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. In fact, until 2011 it fluctuated between 500 and almost 1000
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. As
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car
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theft
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there is no result about solving them.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft, step, times, point with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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