Some believe that secondary school children should study international news like other subjects in school, while others believe that this is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some say that giving knowledge about international
news
is a waste of time, while
others say that it can be good for secondary school children
. Some areas of international news
can be not useful for children
, but I believe that there can be important things
to teach a child
about the news
.
On the one hand, there is a lot of information in the news
that children
will need. Some news
channels talk about not crucial recent actions in government situations that for children
will not be important in future. For example
, when I was a boy, I enjoyed watching the news
with my father and when it came time for presidential elections, my dad always argued with my mother, about who had taken this
position. As a result
, the great people that were in that time, are now not needed persons.
On the other hand
, there is a lot of other information in the news
that for a child
it must be learnt and it is important to teach only the things
that have a big place in the world and will have. For instance
, problems like global warming are essential to study in schools and if children
are the things
like global warming and the extinction of animals, it will be a great influence on future adult people to think about this
problem and think his solutions.
In conclusion, there are people who say it is not needed to study children
in schools at the sources of international news
because there might be stuff that will be no improvement for the child
, but others believe including me that there can be other essential news
for child
and it is good to teach youngth for that things
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