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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 line chart shows the movement
or
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of
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 main fuels
production
 in the UK from 1981 to 2000. Basically,
production
 levels of
petroleum
was
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were
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 the highest among the others.
On the other hand
, coal and natural gas
was fluctuating
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fluctuated
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during
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from
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 1981 to 2000. It was started in 1981 when
petroleum
 became
top
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one of
main
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the main
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 fuel
production
 in the UK, coal was in
the
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second place, and natural gas was the
slightest
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newest
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 one. The rank of
production
 levels remained constant for two years later. In 1984,
while
petroleum
 was reaching its peak, coal fell too far so
that
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natural gas took over its position.
This
 phenomenon had
occured
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occurred
 only for a year. Coal
production
 gained its strength again
for
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apply
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about five years later. Meanwhile, the
production
 of
petroleum
 decreased at that time but
still
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was still
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 on the first level. In 1991, there was rapid growth
of
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in
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 natural
production
 and it suddenly became the
second largest
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second-largest
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 fuel
production
 up until 2000. Contrary, coal decreased ever since. In conclusion,
production
 levels of primary fuels in the UK
were
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fluctuated with ups and
down
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downs
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 through
the
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apply
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time.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, petroleum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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