Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is generally discussed that males and
females
possess various types of skills so both
of these genders are specialised in certain professions. I partially agree with this
statement for some reasons.
To start with, as men
are much stronger and fitter by nature compared to women
, there are some jobs
that females
cannot fulfil such
as miners, builders, porters, truckers and so on. I mean that such
work
requires a lot of energy, strength as well as
endurance. That is
why, women
are incapable of doing heavy work
. However
, I can freely say that females
are much more suitable for particular jobs
that men
are unable to manage like nannies, cleaners, nurses, tailors, etc. Namely, they have been involved in such
kinds of professions for centuries. In our country Uzbekistan, for example
, only a woman can work
as a nanny in kindergartens since they have more roles in children's behavior rather than men
.
Nevertheless
, in our modern society, there are several jobs
that both
males and females
might be able to accomplish. For instance
, in most countries, men
and women
can work
as doctors, teachers and other universal professions as both
of them have the same qualities in these jobs
such
as being creative, skilful, knowledgeable and experienced. In addition
to this
, owing to gender equality, which is being promoted throughout the world, women
can work
as officials in the government. To take an example, a middle-aged lady is the president of Croatia and runs the country well.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is not a good idea to separate jobs
for males or females
as both
can do their best in any occupation.Submitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on
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