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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by a few individuals that having a job at a major corporation is better than a small
one
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. I completely agree with
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this
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 and my opinion will be discussed in detail.
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, working for a big firm gives
one
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 a sense of financial security. Employees working for
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 companies get paid on time. Not only are they paid timely but they can
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 expect salary
hike
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 on a yearly basis.
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, a recent news article showed that professionals working in multinational companies got
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 8% incremental increase in salary on an annual basis.
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, these companies are very well organised compared to their smaller counterparts. Each department
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 individual managers who make
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workflow management easier.
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,
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 a position in large organisations gives
one
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 a chance to work with the best brains in the industry. Working with these talented minds enriches
knowledge
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 of an employee.
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, a survey conducted revealed that working with major corporations increases
ones
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 critical thinking ability by 56%.
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, big firms have an enormous budget and team for research and development, which gives them
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 edge in developing new products. They are able to develop innovative and better products compared to their smaller peers. In conclusion, having a position in huge
organisations
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 not only gives
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a
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monetary security but
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 broadens the horizon of
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 career as
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get
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 a chance to work with the best minds in the world.

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coherence cohesion
You have done a great job in organizing your essay. The logical flow from introduction through body paragraphs to conclusion is commendable. To further enhance your coherence, consider varying your connecting words more to show a wider range of linguistic skills.
task achievement
Your essay successfully addresses the task, providing clear opinions supported by specific examples. To aim for a higher band, make sure to explore both sides of the argument, even if you have a strong opinion. This shows your ability to critically analyze and discuss in a more nuanced manner.
task achievement
Your use of specific examples to support your points is excellent. Incorporating even more varied examples from different sources or personal experiences can enhance the strength of your argument and the richness of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Excellent organization and structure of the essay.
task achievement
Clear and comprehensive discussion of your viewpoint.
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Relevant examples that effectively support your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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