There is argue that college learners should
leftChange the verb form
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their parent to live by themself
withChange preposition
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farCorrect article usage
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distance. To me, living with
parents
university time is better than
from them.
This
essay
showChange the verb form
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several
pointChange to a plural noun
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to disagree
toChange preposition
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this
statement.
FristCorrect your spelling
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and foremost, becoming mature by living far away from
parents
home
could be the listed. After
participantReplace the word
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toChange preposition
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college,
people
tentCorrect your spelling
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to
chooseAdd the particle
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live far away from
home
, might be near schools
instead
. By living by
, they have to prepare and pay every
billsChange to a singular noun
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.
Therefore
some of them
chooseAdd the particle
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go to work for money,
asCorrect word choice
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a
resultAdd the comma(s)
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they become more mature than
people
who still have
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financial support.
For example
, in Vietnam, most
of Change preposition
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part-time employees in
shops,
stores or restaurants are students who
comingWrong verb form
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from
provincesCorrect article usage
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and
stayingWrong verb form
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at
dormFix the agreement mistake
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or rent small
houseFix the agreement mistake
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with friends.
Hence
, being more mature and having
for
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self choicesAdd a hyphen
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are
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brightCorrect article usage
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side of staying far from
parents
.
Nevertheless
,
burden could be the
mostCorrect word choice
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reason for students
from
schoolsFix the agreement mistake
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for money
desirationCorrect your spelling
destination
description
desperation
. Sharing
bills
with
parents
is the right choice at the moment of
staringCorrect your spelling
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inChange preposition
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study high education.
Instead
of paying every bill
in Change preposition
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every month and
the
financeReplace the word
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pressure, young
people
could able to
takeVerb problem
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one or two
bills
for
familyCorrect article usage
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,
as a
resultAdd the comma(s)
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they still are able to take part-time jobs for experience, save
salaryCorrect pronoun usage
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after paying agreed
bills
as the saving account for education.
InChange preposition
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the age of 18, they should not be under pressure of finance, but still need to have
in support sharing
bills
with their mom and dad.
Therefore
, focusing on studying and financial sharing are the
for college students.
Moreover
, safety when staying far from
home
is the primary issue, especially
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femaleFix the agreement mistake
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onesCorrect pronoun usage
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.
InChange preposition
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that age, it cannot be denied that most
of Change preposition
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young
people
have
self awarenessAdd a hyphen
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about danger from
surroundingsCorrect pronoun usage
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,
however
, leaving far from
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parentsChange noun form
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control is
significantCorrect article usage
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. They can easily become
a potential victimsCorrect the article-noun agreement
potential victims
a potential victim
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of frauding from love, job or even bad friends.
For example
, in Vietnam, the announced figures of being
sloveVerb problem
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to Campodia for
highCorrect article usage
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salary these years have
growthReplace the word
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dramatically,
mostCorrect word choice
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of
victimsAdd an article
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are individuals living away from
home
. For that reason, young
people
should live with their
parents
for safety.
ConclusionChange preposition
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, despite living far from
home
could
offersChange the verb form
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various
drawbackFix the agreement mistake
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, especially being mature and freedom
with makingChange preposition
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choices, I
beliveCorrect your spelling
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that living
together with
mom and dad
people
get to
is still
topCorrect article usage
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choice for reducing financial issues and
self securityAdd a hyphen
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.