The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, and the bar graph show the results of a survey into car use

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, and the bar graph show the results of a survey into car use
The graphs illustrate the means of
transport
over
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four
countries
and the reason why people use cars for commuting.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
car
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the car
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is the most popular
modes
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mode
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of
transport
in
four
countries
. Especially, in Canada,
car
is incomparably high.
While
other means account
the
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lowest percentages in each
countries
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.
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,
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Canadians mostly use
car
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cars
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since they go to
works
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and there is no alternative. In detail,
Car
is
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accounted for 90% in Canada, followed by Belgium, Germany, and the Netherlands with 72%,68% and 47%, respectively. Bicycle is the second primary mode of
transport
in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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,
whereas
, its percentage in other
countries
are taken up
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about 2%. Walking and public
transport
are not preferred in
four
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the four
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countries
. Meanwhile, other means of
transport
just comprise
of
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about 2 %
over
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of
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four
countries
.
On the other hand
, as for reasons for Canadians’ preference for
car
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a car
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in
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as
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means
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a means
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of
transport
, commuting and no alternative
are taken
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up 30% and 38%, respectively. Night shift and quicker are comprise
of
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apply
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about 10% of
reason
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the reason
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why people use cars.
While
,
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apply
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Canadian
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Canadians
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who drive cars for convenience record
less
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a less
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significant figure at 23% each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, four, countries, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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