In some countries,the gap between rich and poor is widening. What problems does this create? What measures can be taken to address this issue?

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In the contemporary world,the
board
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border
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between
wealthy
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the wealthy
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and
poor
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the poor
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is widened. It can bring some social
problems
.
This
essay will point
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out and
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explore which
problems
our society has now and which solutions we can use to solve and reduce these
problems
.
To begin
with, widening of classification is able to promote a variety of
problems
like shoplifting,crime,and robbery.
Furthermore
, the lack of funds can play one of the most significant
problems
with education,where
people
with certain talents are unable to
study
with payment methods and should
study
more to gain
the
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scholarship or free
study
.
For example
,
the
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recent survey in Moscow showed that the vast majority of sellers complain of shoplifting in their stores and have the risk of fighting with robbers,who do not want to pay for products and goods. In terms of
study
,many students are suffering,
due to
their conditions and have to work harder to obtain the scholarship,but many
people
with payment methods can afford that and gain more knowledge in university. In terms of a solution,we can set up some programs with wages,which are equal to the subsistence minimum.
This
program can gain some flexibility for students and especially for
people
who have some
problems
with funding and struggling with finding a job.
For instance
, in
Germany
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Germany,
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many
of
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apply
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Ukrainian refugees are working in the
centers
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centres
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,where they are helping their families and compatriots with acclimatization in a new country,studying German language and culture and learning new professions or continuing their previous work.
This
type of job reduces the risks of misunderstanding the citizenship of Germany and
also
minimizes
risk
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the risk
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of crime in their country and brings plenty of opportunities.
This
method can be possible in any country and bring mostly positive outcomes for all citizens and foreign nationals.
To sum up
, our world faces many
problems
including classification,where unfairness between
people
can be measured by their funding levels.
This
essay provides methods,which can reduce the potential
problems
.
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