In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

These days in many nations, the number of elderly

people

Use synonyms

has risen more than ever before and

this

Linking Words

happening has made concerns about how these

people

Use synonyms

can be beneficial or more of a problem for

government

Add an article

the government

show examples

. In

this

Linking Words

passage

Add a comma

passage,

show examples

I am going to discuss why its disadvantages outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, older citizens are the main sources of

local

Add an article

the local

show examples

history

Use synonyms

of their hometown,

therefore

Linking Words

, students can gather a ton of information for either

thesis

Correct pronoun usage

their thesis

show examples

or their own knowledge from their older grandparents, siblings or family friends. Another point of view to

this

Linking Words

opportunity is for writers of

history

Use synonyms

, with the memory some of elderly society which have been through world war 2, nuclear bomb, massacres and so more, they writers can review the

history

Use synonyms

in a more detailed, accurate way and write down the

history

Use synonyms

for the future generations.

But

Correct word choice

On

show examples

on the other hand

Linking Words

,

this

Linking Words

population nowadays cost governments a lot more than before,

for example

Linking Words

, health insurance is a huge part of

Correct article usage

the governments

show examples

governments

Fix the agreement mistake

government

show examples

budget throughout the year,

which

Correct word choice

and

show examples

elderly

people

Use synonyms

include an enormous amount of

this

Linking Words

funding

due to

Linking Words

diseases

such

Linking Words

as diabetes, blood pressure, blood fat and more to mention.

This

Linking Words

money can

be spend

Change the verb form

be spent

show examples

on different expenses of cities to develop, build and construct commercial or recreational areas for youngsters.

In addition

Linking Words

, spending a part of

this

Linking Words

fund on

educational

Add an article

the educational

show examples

system will increase the quality of universities and give students more facilities for a better education. In conclusion, despite

of

Change preposition

apply

show examples

their advantages in categories related to

history

Use synonyms

, older

people

Use synonyms

can

make

Verb problem

face

show examples

a lot of difficulties for governments in terms of

fundings

Fix the agreement mistake

funding

show examples

which clearly illustrates that their negative points outweigh their benefits.