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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ● Explain why you cannot go anymore ● Say who can go instead of you ● Say why this person is a good person to go with

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How are you? I hope you are okay. I know we had planned to go to a
movie
 together, but unfortunately,
due to
 an emergency, I am unable to join you. I know we were eagerly anticipating watching Avengers:
Endgame
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and Endgame
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 together, and we even booked our tickets in advance.
However
, for the past two days, my mom has been unwell,
experiencing
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and experiencing
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 a high fever. We consulted our family doctor, who advised complete bed rest for her for at least a week.
Additionally
, with my father out of town, I am solely responsible for taking care of her.
Therefore
, I regret to inform you that I cannot accompany you to watch our
favorite
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 film. Please don't feel disheartened. I have an alternative arrangement for you. I spoke with
Maulik
, and he is very enthusiastic about joining you for the
movie
.
Maulik
 shares our passion for films, and we have known each other for the past 10 years.
Therefore
, I believe he is the perfect replacement for me. I suggest you enjoy the
movie
 with
Maulik
 for now. We will plan another
movie
 outing soon. Give me a call after the
movie
 to share your experience.
Maulik
 will reach out to you shortly. I hope to see you soon! Yours lovingly, Avi Bhadiyadra
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style
Although your letter is well-expressed and addresses all parts of the task, try to use a more varied sentence structure to enhance readability and flow.
greeting
Consider starting your letter with a direct address to make it more personalized and engaging.
clarity
Your letter is clear and well-structured, making it easy for the reader to understand your situation and the solution you provided.
structure
You effectively used paragraphs to separate different ideas, enhancing the coherence and overall readability of your letter.
tone
The tone of your letter is appropriately friendly and considerate, matching the context of writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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