Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
In modern ages, most
person
believe that Change to a plural noun
people
family
must educate Fix the agreement mistake
families
young
generation on how to be excellent humans in the general public. Add an article
the young
While
others think that school is the best location to study this
. I'll clarify both sides in this
essay.
To begin
with, family are obliged to teach their kids since they were born. The people that children
have the most contact with every day are their parents, especially between 1 to 3 years old. Therefore
, parents need to be role models for children
to follow. Besides
, they need to present basic knowledge
and educate children
on minimum human rules, for example
, not to steal from others or to be violent so that they can form and recognize what is right and good.
On the other hand
, the young are required to gain and develop their knowledge
, skills and experience by attending school.Teachers are people with good knowledge
and extensive experience to guide students with cultural knowledge
that is
not available at home. For example
, children
can study natural, scientific, social and sports subjects to find their strengths and weaknesses to help them develop their good sides and improve their weak sides. Children
learn to work in groups, which can help them increase cricital
teamwork skills.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
critical
Add an article
the kid
a kid
kid
who Fix the agreement mistake
kids
become
Change the verb form
becomes
great
person of citizens must be taught by their Add an article
a great
family
and teachers at school. Both of them are the basic foundation for resulting in well-behaved youngstersFix the agreement mistake
families
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