Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

In modern ages, most
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believe that
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must educate
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generation on how to be excellent humans in the general public.
While
others think that school is the best location to study
this
. I'll clarify both sides in
this
essay.
To begin
with, family are obliged to teach their kids since they were born. The people that
children
have the most contact with every day are their parents, especially between 1 to 3 years old.
Therefore
, parents need to be role models for
children
to follow.
Besides
, they need to present basic
knowledge
and educate
children
on minimum human rules,
for example
, not to steal from others or to be violent so that they can form and recognize what is right and good.
On the other hand
, the young are required to gain and develop their
knowledge
, skills and experience by attending school.Teachers are people with good
knowledge
and extensive experience to guide students with cultural
knowledge
that is
not available at home.
For example
,
children
can study natural, scientific, social and sports subjects to find their strengths and weaknesses to help them develop their good sides and improve their weak sides.
Children
learn to work in groups, which can help them increase
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teamwork skills. In conclusion,
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person of citizens must be taught by their
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and teachers at school. Both of them are the basic foundation for resulting in well-behaved youngsters
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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