Some people think that dangerous sport should be banned others however believe that people should be free to choose sport activities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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I always feel sleepy even after waking up for a long time. At one time in the past,

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unconciousness

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unconsciousness

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, I was unable to recall what I had learnt the previous day and generate any creative original

idea

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, which resulted in me

failling

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failing

the Literature exam. To encounter

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menace to productivity, the search for an energetic drink urged me. At that very moment, the Vietnamese milk

coffee

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came across my mind, and I immediately went on the Internet to find any recipe available. It turned out to be quite simple. To prepare, the ingredients you need are a can of condensed milk,

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and a

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pack of ground

coffee

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beans.

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with, put condensed milk into the cup, at a ratio of 1:4 with

coffee

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The following step is

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to insert a decent amount of ground

coffee

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into a filter, a bit more than half.

Then

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you squeeze the

coffee

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down with a thin plate of metal, which comes in a set with the filter. After that, pour

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the hot boiling water

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into

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the filter, wait until all the

coffee

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drains out,

then

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put in some ice cubes, enjoy, and start your day.

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task achievement

Ensure the essay directly addresses the prompt given. The narrative about the personal experience with Vietnamese milk coffee, while interesting, does not relate to the discussion on dangerous sports and individual freedom to choose activities.

coherence cohesion

Use clear paragraphs to organize your essay, including an introduction, body paragraphs that discuss each view, and a conclusion where you state your own opinion.

coherence cohesion

To improve cohesion, use linking words or phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs smoothly, ensuring the reader can follow your argument easily.

task achievement

Back your discussion with specific examples or reasons why dangerous sports should or should not be banned, and why people should or should not be free to choose their sport activities, before giving your opinion on the matter.

positive feature

Creative and detailed description of making Vietnamese milk coffee, showing good narrative skills.

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Ability to engage the reader with a personal story, highlighting your ability to draw the reader into your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

196 words

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