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The graph and table below show average monthly temperatures and average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The graph and table below show average monthly temperatures and average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features.
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The given graph illustrates the average temperatures in twelve months.
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, the table shows the total
number
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 of sunshine hourly in a
year
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 in three cities, namely
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, the average
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 is
higer
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higher
 than
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London
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in London
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 and New
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york
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York
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 in a
year
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,
while
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 New
York
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 has the largest
number
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 of sunshine yearly,
followd
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followed
 by
Sydney
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 and
London
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. Looking into the graph chart, the average
temperature
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 in January in
Sydney
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 is over 25
degrees
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.
Ather
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After
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 2 months, the
temperature
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 sees a steady decrease to just over 15
degrees
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 in July, before climbing to 25
degrees
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 in
Decemeber
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December
.
On the other hand
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, the average
temperature
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 in New
York
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 and
London
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 sees a similar trend in a
year
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. The average
temperature
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 in
London
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 and New
York
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 are under 10
degrees
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 and under 5
degrees
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 respectively in January. The figures peak
at
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in
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 July, which is under 30
degrees
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 in
Sydney
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 and under 25
degrees
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 in
London
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. Both of the figures drop to below 10
degrees
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 in December. Turning to the table, it is obvious that New
York
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 has the highest
number
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 of
hours
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 of sunshine yearly,
accouting
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accounting
 for 2535
hours
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, followed by
Sydney
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, which contributes to 2473
hours
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 in a
year
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.
By contrast
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, the
number
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 in
London
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 is the lowest, at just 1180
hours
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 annually.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, year, london, york, sydney, temperature, degrees, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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