Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world and what effects does it have on the people concerned and society as a whole?

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Evidence suggests that today, not having any education
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become a concern in plenty of nations all over the world.
This
phenomenon is attributed to a number of causative factors, but the resulting issues are evident as well. As regards the root causes, there are two which should be taken into consideration.
Firstly
, poverty in
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undeveloped countries is to account for
this
problem. Simply put, poor
people
can not afford education expenses.
For example
, money in needed to provide students with books and covers schools' fee
as well as
commuting cost.
Secondly
, the facilities and amenities are not accessible for a wide rang of the public.
That is
, the fundamental needs
such
as schools or teachers to study are not provided by
this
regions' authorities to facilitate
people
's access to them. Take
an
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remote village with
the
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small community as an example;
usually
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there is no educational centre in
this
areas
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and
people
have to sometimes go for miles and miles to get
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place
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the centre
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.
On the other hand
, society faces significant problems
due to
illiteracy. First and foremost, poverty continues growing in poor countries.
That is
, economic growth decreases because of the lack of
literated
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literate
literature
people
and
experties
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experts
.
As a result
,job
apportunities
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opportunities
lost
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and society
become
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poorer.
For instance
, the most essential demand for administtrative jobs is to be able to read, write and work with computers which the illiterate can not do any of them.
Moreover
, illiteracy
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politics. The uneducateds are less likely to choose their politicians consciously,
therefore
; democracy losts and inequality in society increases.
To conclude
, The main contributing factor behind illiteracy is poor
people
who can not pay the cost and the biggest problem caused by
this
trend is the development of poverty in these nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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