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the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph
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 the information about the number of waste supplied by three companies between 2000 and 2015. In general, what stands out from the graph is that companies A and B experienced a downward trend. In the meantime, there was an upward trend in
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company C throughout the period. The graph data clearly shows that in 2005 company A was the highest among these three producers. During 2000-2015 it experienced a slight fall to approximately 8
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, firm B witnessed a gradual increase between 2000 and 2005.
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, it dramatically declined from about 10
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 to 7 during the period from 2005-2010.
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 there was a decrease of almost 4
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 in 2015.
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, company B was the lowest
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 the end of the time.
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, producer C was the lowest at the beginning of the process. It climbed to 6
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 from about 4
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 it rose gradually between 2005-2010.
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, it saw
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rapid growth in 2015 and it was the highest in 2015.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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