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The chart shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different kinds of digital games

The chart shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different kinds of digital games
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The bar graph illustrates the
world wide
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worldwide
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 sales of four various kinds of computerized
games
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 from the
year
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 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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,it can be visible that handheld
games
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 accounted upward trend throughout the time
period
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.
Whereas
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,Console
games
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 recorded
downward
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a downward
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 trend in
given
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a given
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 time
period
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.
To begin
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 with handheld
games
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,only 13
billion
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dollars
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games
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in games
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 were sold out in the
year
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 2000 and
this
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 figure
was
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steadily increased in between the time
period
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 and peaked
nearly
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at nearly
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 18
billion
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dollars
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 in the
year
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 2006,which was
the
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apply
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exceptionally higher selling followed by other years.
Moreover
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,in the
year
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 2000
console
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consoles
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 were sold out by almost 6
billion
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dollars
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,which
was
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dropped by 3
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006.
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Although
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,the trading of console
games
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 remained equal in 2003 and 2004,which was nearly 4
billion
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dollars
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 in both
the
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apply
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years.
Furthermore
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,the least amount of online
games
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were
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sold in 2001 was only 1
billion
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dollars
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 and
this
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statistics
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statistic
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was
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steadily expanded by 1
billion
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dollars
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 till the
year
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 2005 and climbed up
by9
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by 9
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006.
As similar
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Similar
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 to online
games
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 the highest selling of mobile phone
games
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were
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was
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 seen at
end
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the end
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 of the
period
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 around 7
billion
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dollars
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,which was
quite
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quite a
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 high amount as compared to other years.
In contrast
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,the minimal selling of that game was around 2
billion
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dollars
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, year, period, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital gaming industry
  • billions of dollars
  • global sales
  • game genres
  • market trends
  • consumer preferences
  • technology advancements
  • regional differences
  • industry developments
  • mobile gaming
  • eSports
  • revenue streams
  • massively multiplayer online (MMO)
  • first-person shooter (FPS)
  • role-playing games (RPG)
  • strategy games
  • casual games
  • annual growth rate
  • market share
  • user base
  • in-app purchases
  • subscription model
  • cross-platform play
  • virtual reality (VR)
  • augmented reality (AR)
  • gaming consoles
  • gaming peripherals
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