The graphs below depict information about the Expenditure on Health and Education in the UAE (% of GDP) between 1985 and 1993, and also Infant Mortality and Life Expectancy from 1970 to 1992.

The graphs below depict information about the Expenditure on Health and Education in the UAE (% of GDP) between 1985 and 1993, and also Infant Mortality and Life Expectancy from 1970 to 1992.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The presented graphs reveal the information about citizens’ main reasons to (is it collocated?)
study
Use synonyms
, divided into two different categories, and the amount of support that employers give them (
gausah
Correct your spelling
galah
pakai them) based on age groups.
Overall
Linking Words
, we can see that the older people are, the less they
study
Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
a career reason and the less support they receive. As far as the reasons are concerned, a career reason used by people to
study
Use synonyms
witnesses a consistent decrease from 80% to about 19% among all
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
ages. Meanwhile, a different pattern is shown for an
interest
Change the verb form
interesting
show examples
reason, with the
figure’s
Change noun form
figure
show examples
increasing from 10% to 70%, which is a seven-fold growth. Only at the age of 40-49 do the reasons for
study
Use synonyms
have the same number at about 39 %. When it comes to the amount of support received by workers, the number for almost all ages declines from approximately 63% to around 32% except between the ages of 40-49 and above 49, rising from about 39 % to a high of 45 %.
Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: