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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The two pie charts compare a country's proportion of
energy
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 produced by various sources in 1985 and 2003. In 1985,
energy
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 produced dominantly from oil at 52%. Other
energy
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 sources in total contributed less than half, with nuclear and natural gas being utilized over one-tenth at 22% and 13% respectively. The rest were insignificantly producing
energy
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 with coal at 8%, hydrogen at 4% and other renewable as the lowest at 1%.
In contrast
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, the proportion of
energy
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 generated in 2003 apparently had changed drastically, with
energy
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 from oil declining to the level of 39%. Nuclear
energy
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 generators
also
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 experienced a decrease in
energy
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 produced by 5%.
On the other hand
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, natural gas recorded an apparent increase in producing
energy
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 with 10% more compared to 1985.
Furthermore
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, the data indicate no promising
energy
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 transition to other renewable sources, with a slight addition, reaching just 4% after 18 years.
Last
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 but not least, hydrogen was steadily used with the same portion,
while
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 the use of coal grew quite high by 5%.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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