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Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs1 regardless o f their level o f academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#everybody #admission #university #study #programs1 #f #level #ability
Some
people
 think
everyone
 should be able to go to
university
, no matter how good they are at
school
. I
kinda
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agree
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 with
this
 idea, but only to a point. On one hand, opening up
university
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 to
everyone
 could be a good thing. It gives
everyone
 a chance to learn and improve themselves. Plus, some
people
 might not do so well in
school
, but they might have other skills or talents that could be useful in
university
. But
on the other hand
,
university
 is supposed to be for
people
 who are good at studying and want to learn more about a specific subject. If we let
everyone
 in, it might lower the quality of education for
everyone
. Plus, it could be unfair to students who worked really hard to get into
university
. From my own experience, I know some
people
 who struggled in
school
 but did really well in
university
. But I
also
 know others who didn't do so well because they weren't ready for the level of work.
Overall
, I think it's important to have some standards for
university
 admission. Maybe there could be other ways for
people
 who aren't so good at
school
 to still have opportunities for higher education, like special programs or courses. But just letting
everyone
 in might not be the best idea.
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