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The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015.
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America by their Annual earning between 2007 , 2011 and 2015 From the beginning of 200

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household income
  • income brackets
  • trend analysis
  • income distribution
  • economic policies
  • inflation
  • job market
  • notable shifts
  • overall trend
  • low-income households
  • middle-income households
  • high-income households
  • time periods
  • factors contributing
  • implications
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