In some areas of US, a "curfew" is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors after a particular time at night unless they are with an adult. what is your opinion about this?
Nowadays in some parts of United States, adolescents are restricted to go out of their house after certain time at night, unless they are accompined by an adult. I completely agree with
this
statement because, the increasing number of crimes and irresponsible nature of young children it is unsafe for them to stay out of their safe place.
With increasing crime rates it has become dangerous for an individual especially a teenager to stay out of their home for really long hours at night. Linking Words
Moreover
, theft, robbery, and stabbing has become Linking Words
such
a common thing that it is important for parents to impose a restriction on their kids in and out time. Linking Words
For instance
: Statastics shows that there has been a massive increase in the stab victims in US and most of them are teenagers.
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Furthermore
, teenagers are at Linking Words
such
a vunerable stage of life, going through multiple changes (mentally and physically) in their body that it is easy for them to indulge themselves into wrong habits Linking Words
such
as: smoking, drinking and drugs. It is difficult for the children in the age group of 13- 19 years to understand the consequences of their actions. To exemplify: In northern Island, the police stop and catch young teenagers with bottle of alcohol every weekend.
In conclusion, I believe Linking Words
due to
sky rocketing statastics of crimes happening around the world it is unsafe to send young adults alone out at night. Linking Words
In addition
to that, as their minds are not fully developed to make the difference between right and wrong choices it is quite easy for them to get into trouble.Linking Words
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Provide more diverse examples and evidence to strengthen your argument, especially from a variety of sources or regions, to support your claim about the effectiveness of curfews in reducing crime and protecting teenagers.
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Enhance your essay by developing a more complex sentence structure and using a wider range of vocabulary. This will make your writing more engaging and demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.
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Your introduction effectively sets the stage for your discussion, clearly stating your stance on the issue.
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Use of concrete examples, such as the statistics about stab victims and the situation in Northern Island, effectively supports your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion successfully summarizes your main arguments, reinforcing your perspective.
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