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Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self study is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 fast-paced world, the majority of individuals prefer to work for the same
company
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 in the long run. Businesses should hire those
workers
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 who are loyal to the
company
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 in any situation. In my personal opinion, I neither agree nor disagree with the above notion.
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 situation only depends on the facts,
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how the
company
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 provides basic needs to
employees
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.
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 with the root , Different
employees
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 work for the same
company
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due to
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 many reasons. Here, I would like to mention two main specific reasons .
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, the chance of promotion which is usually on the basis of productivity set by the
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.
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,
employees
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 worked hard burning the midnight oil to achieve the target sometimes
employees
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 should be rewarded with some kind of incentive.
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, A policy set by the different pharmaceutical
companies
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 for their
employees
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, to accomplish their goals annually will be awarded one international tour and
employees
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considered
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 to be eligible for promotion in their ranks.
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,
companies
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 provide medical insurance to their employee's families and increase their salaries
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 inflation and social economical status.
Workers
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 get benefits from these perks and do work with full devotion.
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the COVID-19 economic crisis hit all
the
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businesses globally. Different
companies
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 readjust or increase the salaries of their
employees
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due to
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 changes in economic conditions.
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, Employers provide medical insurance to their all
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 up to 100k annually.
To Sum up
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,
workers
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 provide services to the
company
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 till death if
companies
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 look after their basic needs
such
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 as salary and health benefits .

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Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your stance and what will be discussed in the essay. This makes it easier for the reader to follow the argument.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs are logically organized and connected. This will help in maintaining coherence throughout the essay.
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Provide more detailed and varied examples to strengthen your arguments and provide a more persuasive essay.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition and ensure that each sentence in a paragraph contributes to the development of the main idea.
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You provided clear and specific reasons to support your points, making the argument more credible.
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You included relevant examples, which helped in clarifying and supporting your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay was generally well-organized with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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