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The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the enviornment and the food chain.

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The presented
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 explain the process of how pollutants from fast-paced life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain. As we can see from the
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that
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how much
responsible
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 are our housing society, transport facilities, factories and power stations
smoke
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to generate air pollution by eliminating carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury and other compounds in
air
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the air
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.
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Thereafter
, the pollutants rise to clouds and afterwards
it
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crosses
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 over countries and continents. After, these clouds turn to acid
rain fall
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 in many countries as they are laden with pollutants. It can be clearly seen in
images
 that
these
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 acid rainfall disturbs trees and plants
to
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grow and how it enters the food chains through hills and fields, lakes and rivers.
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, it can be depicted from the given
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 that how air pollution disturbs our natural environment and affects the food chains.
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Detail enhancement
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Sentence variety
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to improve readability and maintain the reader's interest throughout your essay.
Argument depth
To strengthen your argument, you might want to explore potential solutions or actions that could mitigate the impact of acid rain, thus providing a more rounded perspective on the issue.
Main idea presentation
You've effectively summarized the main idea of how pollutants transform into acid rain and its subsequent impact on the environment and food chains.
Structure
Your essay structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively encapsulates the argument, making your point clear to the reader.
Coherence and logic
You've done well in linking the process of pollution to its effects on the environment, maintaining a logical flow in your discussion.

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