You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you " say how the course will be useful for your job
Dear Mr Brown,
I am writing to you to express my interest in proposing
a
training in Australia next month and to imagine how it might improve my skills.
It is true that the training would increase my knowledge and experience of network engineering in Remove the article
apply
this
position because I already have checked the content of the course. For instance
, the course includes the Network Administration and the Troubleshooting subjects.
I would suggest that the company not only take the training fees, but also
take absence duration, and to be responsible for my duties during this
period such
as operations and maintenance of the network.
If I attended the course, I would have a chance to implement ongoing projects with less
risks, and in a short time. Change the quantifier
fewer
Moreover
, after the training, I could possibly organize local training in our office. As a result
, more employees could involved in professional training.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours Faithfully,
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coherence
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task achievement
For a higher score in task achievement, elaborate further on how the course specifically ties to your current projects or responsibilities, showing clear benefits to the company.
logical structure
The structure of your letter is clear, with a logical flow from introduction, explanation, request, to conclusion.
suitable writing tone
You've used a professional and polite tone throughout the letter, appropriate for the context of writing to a manager.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which helps in making your letter coherent and easy to follow.