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Nowadays, food has becomes easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

#food #change #people
In
todays
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 industrialized,
fast pacing
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fast-paced
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 world, everything including
process
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the process
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 of making a meal has become easier because of
desire
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the desire
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 of everyone which is to save
their
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time
 and effort. In terms of consumption, food is the main source for humans. In the past, producing food was
lot
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 harder task compared to now
due to
the
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facts
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factors
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such
 as shortage of tools, and ingredients.
Subsequently
,
technology
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 developments have made
many
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progression
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 in
this
 field.
This
 includes advances in tools
as well as
 genetic improvements
on
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 ingredients.
For example
, both rice and rice
cooker
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cookers
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 reduced
its
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 duration
to cook
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.
Thus
, progression
such
 as these made cooking simple and
time saving
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. As I forementioned, those developments filled up people’s desire to conserve their
time
 and effort. Simplification is
a
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popular
with
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,
however
thus
 can lead to obesity among people. In fact, everything which is simple to make
,
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 makes people lazier
that
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than
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 in the past. Albeit, in my opinion, as long as they are spending their
time
 on
right
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 activities
this
 can be justified. In conclusion, it seems to me that
although
 there are probabilities for humans to become obese,
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the upgrade
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 can not be seen as an adverse development.
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Task Response
You effectively addressed the prompt, discussing the impact of easier food preparation on lifestyle.
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Structure
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear opening and closing to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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