Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent (widespread) and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, fast
food
will
become popular and is increasing significantly. Verb problem
has
Due to
this
, our traditional foods
and methods of preparation can be replaced by foreign foods
or convenience
foods
. On the other hand
, this
trend may be a good selection but has a bad impact in other states.
On the one hand, if foods
cook faster, also
sell cheaper, and people
tend to buy more food
. If foods
have will be unusual, such
as convenience
food
and tastier, people
desire to buy appear interested that's foods
will buy. For example
, hamburgers, sandwiches and lavashs. Moreover
, people
learned how to new food
and new recept cooking, rather than eating their national dish all the time.
On the other hand
, for various reasons, it would be wrong to replace traditional foods
with convenience
foods
. Especially, convenience
foods
are physically dangerous to humans because they are high in sugar, carbohydrates, or saturated fat and lack vitamins or minerals. Furthermore
, if all individuals prefer to buy only convenience
foods
, their traditional foods
, traditional culture and methods of preparation can disappear. If people
get used to using convenience
foods
they can be lazy and, they may even will not even be able to cook for their family members.
In conclusion,it all depends on the person. If people
balance their consumption of fast foods
, don't their traditional foods
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