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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries.
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The given table presents the percentage of consumer expenditure for 3 categories of products in five
countries
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 in 2002.
Overll
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Overall
, Turkey had the largest share of expenditure dedicated to food, drink and tobacco among the five given
countries
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,
whereas
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 that of leisure and education in Spain accounted for the lowest.
Although
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 the percentage of money spent on clothing and footwear in Italy and Sweden was 9% and 5.40%, respectively, the figures for the three remaining
countries
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, namely Ireland, Spain, and Turkey,
around
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 6.5 %. In terms of food, drinks, and tobacco, turkey
spend
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spent
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 the most at 32.14 %, followed by
at
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Irland, 28.91%.
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, the proportion of the consumer cost
was
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allocated to food, drinks and tobacco in other mentioned
countries
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 was less than 18.80
percent
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per cent
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. The share of money spent on leisure and education in Spain ranked
first,
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which was nearly 2%,
while
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in
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Sweden stood at the
last
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 in the amount allocated.
Additionally
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, the amount of money spent on leisure and education in Italy and Sweden was about 3.20%, compared to it reached 2.21% in
Irland
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Ireland
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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