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The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island , according to a survey of Visitors . Summaries the information by selecting and re reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .

The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island , according to a survey of Visitors . Summaries the information by selecting and re reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
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The two pie charts classify feedback from
Bowen
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Island
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 visitors, distinguished by its advantages and disadvantages aspects, with each chart sharing the same number of categories.
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, the high cost of living was perceived as the main downside,
whereas
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 the people majorly agreed as the best feature of
Bowen
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Island
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In contrast
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, food quality was the least voted as the bad side,
while
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 good accommodation was accepted as the good side of the
island
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. Going to the details, a quarter of the respondents claimed that entertainment proved to be lousy and only 15% experienced the weather of
Bowen
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Island
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 did not meet their preference.
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, the scenery was the second thing most-liked at 35%, followed by the culture just a tad higher than the
last
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 place at 12%. Interestingly, despite the high cost of living on the
island
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, it did not make most visitors feel the place offered good accommodation. In summary, visiting
Bowen
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Island
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 made people enjoy its people and scenery, though mostly felt a high cost of living must be paid
as a consequence
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bowen, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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