The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about the production of industrial bricks.
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the process is simple with only seven steps, starting with digging the clay, through various steps, and ending with the final product being distributed.
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procedure, the clays, which are used to make brick, are dug by an excavator. After that, they are laid out on a grid, with the help of a roller, to distinguish metal and sand. The result is pure sand. Once water is added, the mixture is thick enough to form the blocks. The workers make those by either putting the blend into the mould or cutting it with a wire cutter.
The prototype continues with the shaped combination is placed and dried in a drying oven for 1 or 2 days, before being transported to a chamber which is separated by three different cavities. After experiencing moderate and high temperatures, the product is cooled down in a cooling chamber for 2 or 3 days. Linking Words
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, the completed bricks are ready to be packaged and distributed by trucks for sale.Linking Words
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