In future all cars, buses, and trucks will driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicales outweight the disadvantages?

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transportation in the future,
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means,
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transportations
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will be
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auto-operated
. In my opinion,
although
there are some advantages of running
vehicles
without
drivers
, I believe that
drivers
have played an vital
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in
operarting vechicles
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operating vehicles
.
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,
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think the drawbacks of driverless
vehicales outweight
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vehicles outweigh
the benefits. One of the significant drawbacks is that there are existing
danger
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of operating
vehicles
without
drivers
, which may put the
passangers
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passengers
in danger.
For example
, the driverless
vechicles
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vehicles
rely on technology. If the operation of technology is out of order, the
vehicles
may stop running. If there are no
driver
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drivers
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in the
vehicles
, no one can help with arranging the
passagers
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passengers
instantly.
As a result
, the
passangers
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passengers
are disrupted, even put in danger. Another
privotal
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pivotal
disavantage
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disadvantage
is that present
drivers
are more likely to be
umempolyed
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unemployed
employed
, declining their job opportunities in the future. The more
driveless
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driverless
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cars
, the less
drivers
are needed.
As a result
,
enoumerous
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enormous
drivers
will be replaced by machines. Losing their jobs, the
drivers
no longer
rasie
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raise
their
family
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families
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, especially those who are bread-makers in their
familes
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families
.
Although
some
peope
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people
may argue that
driveless
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driverless
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cars
may increase the efficiency of transportation because it can decrease the possible effect of
drivers
due to
their abilities. I think
drivers
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cruicial
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crucial
in operating a
cars
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car
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as well as
providing
postive
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positive
proactive
service to customers. By way of conclusion,
i
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I
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firmly believe that the drawbacks of
drivelss
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driverless
driveless
cars
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
the advantages. It will not only affect the safety of
passangers
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passengers
, but
also
influence the job
opportunites
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opportunities
of existing
drivers
.
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Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors which might distract readers from your argument ('people has' should be 'people have', 'privotal' should be 'pivotal', and 'umempolyed' should be 'unemployed').
balance argument
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task response
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