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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctor and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training.Others believe they should be free to work in the country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctor #engineers #work #country
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 professionals, that kind of
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doctor
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doctors
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 engineers,must be necessary to work in the
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 where they did their studying.Others believe they can be free to work in the
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. Because why
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 experiences with other countries.Because of
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every day.
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 I live in Kazakhstan but I will
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 2 years, and after
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introduction
Consider starting with a clear introduction that presents the topic and your thesis statement. This helps the reader understand what the essay will cover.
balance
Make sure to discuss both viewpoints fully before presenting your own opinion. Your essay should explore the reasons behind each perspective to provide a balanced discussion.
specific examples
Focus on providing clear, relevant examples to support your ideas. Real-world examples can significantly strengthen your argument.
conclusion
End your essay with a concise conclusion that summarizes your discussion and reiterates your personal stance. This gives your essay a clear and impactful closure.
coherence
Ensure logical flow and coherence between your ideas. Using linking words effectively can help connect your sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
completeness
Completing your thoughts and sentences gives your argument more clarity. Make sure to finish each idea you start to convey full information to the reader.
idea
You've touched upon the importance of sharing experiences and knowledge internationally, which is a valuable perspective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • Brain drain
  • Skill shortage
  • Career mobility
  • Global workforce
  • Economic impact
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