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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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Given is a map illustrating the changes in
waterfront
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the waterfront
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area
 of
particular
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a particular
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 town named Darwin in a 5-year period from 2009.
Overall
, there was
considerable
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the considerable
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 enhancement of the settlement throughout the years, and it was gradually transformed from
rural
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a rural
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 village into
largely
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a largely
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resindential
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residential
area
.
Moreover
, greener zones have been increased. In 2014, the most noticeable development was the replacement of industrial areas with greener spaces. Compared to the past, the village population has been increasing,
thus
 more residential buildings were constructed near the original dwelling site.
In addition
,
there
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apply
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is new harbour was added with its footpath which passes through the residential
area
. Looking to the left side of the map,
university
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the university
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 was added next to the apartments
as well
as
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and
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 there was another change in
swimming
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the swimming
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 pool which was built between
school
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the school
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 and
lake
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the lake
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.
However
, the convention
center
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centre
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, school and fishing
area
 remained as these
facitilies
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facilities
 did.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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