after Completing High School and Before Going to College or university, some students take a year off either to work or travel. What do you think is better – travelling or working. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.
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students
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the
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workplace
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workplace
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some
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positive
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the students
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their sventeen
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year
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adequate
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to take whole their life responsibilities. Correct your spelling
appearance
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parents
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that
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to
them
. Correct pronoun usage
theirs
Japnes
nations, Correct your spelling
Japanese
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ethintic
morals. Correct your spelling
ethnic
authentic
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of
families have been sending their children to Change preposition
apply
Japen
.
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Japan
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parents
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avoid
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children
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a high schools
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high schools
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