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The diagram below gives information about the process of making pots

The diagram below gives information about the process of making pots
the picture illustrates the vessel's process. It is important to note that only the painting is happening by hand and other steps are automated. In the first step, the lift truck collects raw materials in a heavy truck which is used to transfer mud to the factory. In the factory, mud will go through crushing machines and
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 the crushed materials will be mixed with water. In the next step, the moulds will rest in a big pot in order to find the shape of the vessel after
dryingfor
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drying for
 4to 6 hours the assembled clay pots are ready to cook at even at 1000 degrees Celsius.
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, pots will be coloured in the next step by hand and go
to
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through
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 the
colour firing
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colour-firing
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 process in order to fix the colour.
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,
finished
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the finished
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 pots are ready to use.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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