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Band 4.5

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B, and C over four different seasons.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B, and C over four different seasons.
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The bar chart below
illusrates
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illustrates
 the
points
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 gained by three
diffirent
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different
 teams [
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 A,
team
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B
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 and
team
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C
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] in four
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different
years
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.
Overall
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,
team
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B
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in
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 the top with
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the highest
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 marks in all
years
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while
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team
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C
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 is
in
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 the bottom with
lowest
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the lowest
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 scores in all
years
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.
To begin
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 with, in 2002
team
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 A in the deepest position with only 5
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while
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team
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C
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is
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 in
second
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 position with 10
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 but
team
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is
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on
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 the peak with a large
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dispute
 and 82 marks. In 2003, again
team
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 A
has
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had
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 the lowest
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 of 11
while
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team
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C
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has
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had
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15p
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15
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 but again
team
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B
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is
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 first with a big distance with two other
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team
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 and 60
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. In 2004, unlike
of
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peviouse
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previous
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team
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 A
is
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on
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 second position with 35
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 close to
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team
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B
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 with 43
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while
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team
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C
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is
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in
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 the bottom with just 12
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. In 2005,
team
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C
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is
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repeatly
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repeatedly
repeated
in
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 meanwhile
team
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has
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had
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 8
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 but as always
team
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B
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is
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in
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 the top with a great difference and 55
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, team, b, years, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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