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What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism?

#tourism
Tourism
 is
the
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one of the popular discussion
topic
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 in every family.
in
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below I am going to discuss both the merits and demerits of both topics.
Firstly
, There are so many advantages of doing
tourism
 each year. some people would prefer to go after every three months. It mostly depends on the economic growth of the family. By the trip, a lot of the population will get relief from their stressful and depressing life. It is very important to bring back
the
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mental health
also
 it's helpful to connect with nature which is the need of
this
 pollutant community.
Moreover
, Will get to relate
with
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 other cultures and traditions of other countries. it helps to build a network in the unknown society. Adaptability in the lifestyle
which
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is the main aim of
the
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tourism
.
Secondly
, There are some disadvantages
like
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as I mentioned in the first paragraph mostly it depends on the economic health of the family, there is loss of money which will be wast and it affects the budget for the full month. because of that some important plans will get postponed.
Also
 after coming from
long
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 vacation, some members get sick because of an unsuitable environment or a change in water. The conclusion with,
tourism
 has more advantages than disadvantages, I like
tourism
. To explore
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new places without any rules and regulations for relatives. we can roam around with our favourite people to spend quality time.
this
 is my view of looking at
tourism
 Everybody has their own perspective looking at
tourism
. Thank you.
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Structure
Consider organizing your essay more clearly with distinct introduction, body paragraphs each discussing a unique point, and a conclusion that summarizes your views.
Detail
Work on developing your ideas further with examples and explanations to more effectively demonstrate your points.
Language Use
Avoid repetitive phrases and aim for a variety of sentence structures to enrich your writing.
Grammar
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and punctuation to enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Conclusion
Make sure your conclusion directly addresses the topic by clearly summarizing the advantages and disadvantages discussed.
Engagement
You have effectively conveyed your enthusiasm for tourism and expressed a personal viewpoint, which is good for task engagement.
Balance
You've included both sides of the argument, providing a balanced overview of the topic.

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